Critique

I really appreciated everyone's comments. I felt that I left the critique with lots of substantial suggestions to help me better my piece. Especially comments about exaggerating characters, and differentiating the voices between the writer and the pianist. I find it difficult to revise my own work after working on it for so long, so I appreciate the fresh perspectives. I definitely intend to dive into exaggerating characters and their voices, priority number one.

Thank you all for your suggestions. I can't wait to look over what I've done with a new revisions in mind.

And now for the part about what I will not change. It's an interesting feeling to actually announce what it is that I will not change in my story.... Usually it's easier to just not change it, and let the critiquers roll their eyes when they realize my decision.

The transitional shift between the meeting of the writer and the pianist, and the actual establishment of the relationship:

Yes, I will try to stick a transitional sentence or two to make the shift more fluid.

No, I will not elaborate on how they got to that point. They just kind of do.
I mean, the fact that everyone was so curious as to why in the hell the pianist likes the writer so much, that's exactly what I'm going for. The writer doesn't even know how, exactly, she got into this relationship, but she did. The pianist is the only one who really knows how it happened, and since the narrator is more of a close third to the writer, well... I hope you see where I'm going with this.

Anyway, thanks again.

Cristina